Mary Meyer
Ms. Lehmann
March 12, 2019
English 1-3
A New Rhulain
It was reaching the end of autumn, and the inhabitants of Green Isle were bustling around with the heavy harvest upon them. There was joking, laughing, and singing as the otters labored under the bright morning sun. Many of these otters were happy, knowing that their work was done by free will, unlike when they were slaves under the wildcat Riggu Felis several seasons ago. Since then, they had lived happily under their ruler, the High Rhulain.* Tiria, the Rhulain, was standing on a hilltop, watching the happy otters gather the remainder of the harvest, when she heard a voice call out to her.
“Hey, Ma! Are you going to stand there gazing all day, or are you going to come down and help us lug these baskets to the stores?” shouted out Lianthia (Lee-an-thee-a), the oldest of Tiria’s children (almost immediately very good with any weapon), who was now six seasons into her adulthood.
“And are you going to stand there yipping all season, or are you going to get that basket to the stores?” she replied with a grin on her face. Bounding down, she picked up a basket full of apples next to Lianthia, and raced off to the stores with Lianthia right behind her, both laughing.
When they arrived at the cave where the otter clans were storing the harvest and had put down their baskets, an otter ran up to them. It was Keldo, Tiria’s middle child
and only son, who was also a master archer.
“Ma, a vermin crew has been sighted a league off to the west, sailing straight towards Green Isle! Dad’s waiting there. He said you’re to come join him with a score of fighters.”
“Will do, Keldo. Here, you and Brook take some weapons and go ahead. I’ll gather the others and come up behind you. I’ll have to put a couple in charge to gather and get the rest of the clans into hiding,” the Rhulain replied quickly. Brook, Tiria’s youngest child, a master swordsbeast, and the fleetest of foot, came forward, hearing her mother’s words. Then, she and Keldo grabbed a lance each plus an extra for their father and headed off towards the west shore. When the Rhulain had a score of fighters, she turned to her other child.
“Lianthia, I’m going to need you here to help watch over the clans. I know you would like to go join us on the shore, but I need you and your skill ready for defense here,” she said. “Do you understand?”
Lianthia replied, “Yes. I understand that you need me here, majesty.” The Rhulain smiled, knowing by the way her daughter had addressed her that she would do what her Queen commanded. And then, the Rhulain took off after Brook and Keldo with a score of warriors.
Deedero Galedeep and Lianthia managed to get all the otters into the large, secret cave behind the waterfall, except for a small kitt (what they called their young otters) named Reed. He had overheard the Rhulain and Keldo, and had decided he was going to fight the vermin. Grabbing a stick for a sword, he followed after the Rhulain and her warriors. Back at the cave, Lianthia noticed that Reed was missing.
“Deedero, did you see Reed?” she asked.
“I think I saw him heading towards the coast after your mum and the others.” Deedero replied. “He's probably gone off to fight the vermin, like any kitt would. I need to go get him.”
However, Lianthia grabbed a shield and slung it over her shoulder to join her sword, sling, and the stone carrier that she always carried with her.
“You stay here and keep the clans in order. I'll go after him. He's bound to get in trouble, and I have a better chance of fighting off the vermin,” she said, and with that, she took off after Reed.
Meanwhile, Reed was crawling under some bushes when a paw grabbed him from behind. He was pulled out by a searat, Filgu, captain of the ship that Leatho had seen coming in. He alone had escaped the Rhulain's attack on his crew. Holding his sword to Reed, Filgu chuckled to himself.
“Harhar, what 'ave we 'ere?” Filgu said more to himself then the kitt.
“let me go, ya big bully!” Reed cried out. Suddenly, the war cry of the clans was heard.
“Eeeeeee aye eeeeeeeh!” Lianthia came charging out, bulling Filgu over and pushing Reed out of harm’s way. Filgu charged at Lianthia, who fought him for a little bit, hoping to avoid having to kill him. After a few minutes of fighting, Lianthia was forced to slay him, ending the reign of a coward who had brought terror to many lands.
Some weeks later, Tiria crowned Lianthia as the new High Rhulain, Queen of Green Isle. Tiria had seen that her daughter was ready, and had learned the lesson that she would have to face her troubles sooner or later.
* To know more of Tiria's story, read The High Rhulain.
Narrative Reflection
Mary Meyer
Ms. Lehmann
English 1-3
13 March 2019
*List one thing you’ve learned from writing this paper that you can apply to other writhing assignments. What will that look like?
- I found out that it’s harder to stay under the maximum when making a story that you start getting into, and also hard to have only three pages when the story is suppose to have description and dialogue.
*Identify a specific revision you were asked to make and explain why (this can be at any stage of the writing process). How did you revise? What did you learn?
-Most of the revisions I was asked to make were mostly putting marks (commas, quotations, etc.) It was simply taken care of by making the corrections put down by my teacher. The big correction I had to make was moving a certain note into the footer. I had trouble putting it on the footer of one page only, so I needed to get help. I learned how to put something in one footer only.
*What are the conventions of a narrative and how did you meet those in this assignment?
- In a narrative, you can use dialogue, literary devices, and description. In my narrative, I used some good dialogues and some good descriptions.
*Given more time to work on this assignment, how would you improve it?
-If I had more time to work on this assignment, I would make more of a three page story instead of a ten page story that’s missing a lot of the stuff I wish I could of put in.
*What is one thing you’re proud of in this paper?
- One thing I might say that I’m proud of is that my first draft was mostly correct with wording and telling the story, and that the only fixes that needed made was fixing little things here and there.
Ms. Lehmann
March 12, 2019
English 1-3
A New Rhulain
It was reaching the end of autumn, and the inhabitants of Green Isle were bustling around with the heavy harvest upon them. There was joking, laughing, and singing as the otters labored under the bright morning sun. Many of these otters were happy, knowing that their work was done by free will, unlike when they were slaves under the wildcat Riggu Felis several seasons ago. Since then, they had lived happily under their ruler, the High Rhulain.* Tiria, the Rhulain, was standing on a hilltop, watching the happy otters gather the remainder of the harvest, when she heard a voice call out to her.
“Hey, Ma! Are you going to stand there gazing all day, or are you going to come down and help us lug these baskets to the stores?” shouted out Lianthia (Lee-an-thee-a), the oldest of Tiria’s children (almost immediately very good with any weapon), who was now six seasons into her adulthood.
“And are you going to stand there yipping all season, or are you going to get that basket to the stores?” she replied with a grin on her face. Bounding down, she picked up a basket full of apples next to Lianthia, and raced off to the stores with Lianthia right behind her, both laughing.
When they arrived at the cave where the otter clans were storing the harvest and had put down their baskets, an otter ran up to them. It was Keldo, Tiria’s middle child
and only son, who was also a master archer.
“Ma, a vermin crew has been sighted a league off to the west, sailing straight towards Green Isle! Dad’s waiting there. He said you’re to come join him with a score of fighters.”
“Will do, Keldo. Here, you and Brook take some weapons and go ahead. I’ll gather the others and come up behind you. I’ll have to put a couple in charge to gather and get the rest of the clans into hiding,” the Rhulain replied quickly. Brook, Tiria’s youngest child, a master swordsbeast, and the fleetest of foot, came forward, hearing her mother’s words. Then, she and Keldo grabbed a lance each plus an extra for their father and headed off towards the west shore. When the Rhulain had a score of fighters, she turned to her other child.
“Lianthia, I’m going to need you here to help watch over the clans. I know you would like to go join us on the shore, but I need you and your skill ready for defense here,” she said. “Do you understand?”
Lianthia replied, “Yes. I understand that you need me here, majesty.” The Rhulain smiled, knowing by the way her daughter had addressed her that she would do what her Queen commanded. And then, the Rhulain took off after Brook and Keldo with a score of warriors.
Deedero Galedeep and Lianthia managed to get all the otters into the large, secret cave behind the waterfall, except for a small kitt (what they called their young otters) named Reed. He had overheard the Rhulain and Keldo, and had decided he was going to fight the vermin. Grabbing a stick for a sword, he followed after the Rhulain and her warriors. Back at the cave, Lianthia noticed that Reed was missing.
“Deedero, did you see Reed?” she asked.
“I think I saw him heading towards the coast after your mum and the others.” Deedero replied. “He's probably gone off to fight the vermin, like any kitt would. I need to go get him.”
However, Lianthia grabbed a shield and slung it over her shoulder to join her sword, sling, and the stone carrier that she always carried with her.
“You stay here and keep the clans in order. I'll go after him. He's bound to get in trouble, and I have a better chance of fighting off the vermin,” she said, and with that, she took off after Reed.
Meanwhile, Reed was crawling under some bushes when a paw grabbed him from behind. He was pulled out by a searat, Filgu, captain of the ship that Leatho had seen coming in. He alone had escaped the Rhulain's attack on his crew. Holding his sword to Reed, Filgu chuckled to himself.
“Harhar, what 'ave we 'ere?” Filgu said more to himself then the kitt.
“let me go, ya big bully!” Reed cried out. Suddenly, the war cry of the clans was heard.
“Eeeeeee aye eeeeeeeh!” Lianthia came charging out, bulling Filgu over and pushing Reed out of harm’s way. Filgu charged at Lianthia, who fought him for a little bit, hoping to avoid having to kill him. After a few minutes of fighting, Lianthia was forced to slay him, ending the reign of a coward who had brought terror to many lands.
Some weeks later, Tiria crowned Lianthia as the new High Rhulain, Queen of Green Isle. Tiria had seen that her daughter was ready, and had learned the lesson that she would have to face her troubles sooner or later.
* To know more of Tiria's story, read The High Rhulain.
Narrative Reflection
Mary Meyer
Ms. Lehmann
English 1-3
13 March 2019
*List one thing you’ve learned from writing this paper that you can apply to other writhing assignments. What will that look like?
- I found out that it’s harder to stay under the maximum when making a story that you start getting into, and also hard to have only three pages when the story is suppose to have description and dialogue.
*Identify a specific revision you were asked to make and explain why (this can be at any stage of the writing process). How did you revise? What did you learn?
-Most of the revisions I was asked to make were mostly putting marks (commas, quotations, etc.) It was simply taken care of by making the corrections put down by my teacher. The big correction I had to make was moving a certain note into the footer. I had trouble putting it on the footer of one page only, so I needed to get help. I learned how to put something in one footer only.
*What are the conventions of a narrative and how did you meet those in this assignment?
- In a narrative, you can use dialogue, literary devices, and description. In my narrative, I used some good dialogues and some good descriptions.
*Given more time to work on this assignment, how would you improve it?
-If I had more time to work on this assignment, I would make more of a three page story instead of a ten page story that’s missing a lot of the stuff I wish I could of put in.
*What is one thing you’re proud of in this paper?
- One thing I might say that I’m proud of is that my first draft was mostly correct with wording and telling the story, and that the only fixes that needed made was fixing little things here and there.